05/05/2023
Working on an email to send to my Clients. What do you think A or B?
Message A
Oh dear, it seems that $COMPANY is still holding on to their old hardware, which is causing a significant loss of employee productivity. You see, the average life-cycle of business hardware is 4-6 years, and after that time, there is an increased chance of hardware failure. But of course, that's something $COMPANY should have already known. I mean, it's common sense, isn't it?
It's no wonder that employees are wasting their workday away waiting for their outdated computer to respond and load software. I mean, it's not like they have anything better to do, right? And to make matters worse, $COMPANY owns several old computers that use hard drives, which are notorious for being slow and unreliable.
Luckily, Salmon Bay Technology has stepped in to save the day. We've been talking with our trusted hardware supplier about placing a bulk order for new desktop computers. These computers have current-year hardware specs and will last the full 4-6 year expected life-cycle, unlike $COMPANY's outdated hardware.
And guess what? These new computers are competitively priced and cost less than comparable hardware from other suppliers like Lenovo, Dell, HP, etc. Plus, they're physically smaller and draw much less power than older hardware, so $COMPANY can save money on energy costs too.
And don't worry, we would provide warranty services for the hardware should it fail. I mean, we're not amateurs like $COMPANY, right? So, what do you say? Are you finally ready to upgrade to some modern hardware and join us in the 21st century?
Message B
We consider the average life-cycle of business hardware to be 4-6 years. After which point in time, there is an increased chance of hardware failure, and loss of employee productivity.
Old hardware runs slower, so often employees are wasting their workday away waiting for their computer to respond and load software. This issue is especially prevalent with old computers that use hard drives, which $COMPANY owns several of.
Salmon Bay Technology has been talking with a trusted hardware supplier about placing a bulk order for new desktop computers. These computers will last the full 4-6 year expected life-cycle, as they have current-year hardware specs.
These new computers are competitively priced, and cost less than comparable hardware from other suppliers like Lenovo, Dell, HP, etc. The computers are also physically smaller, and draw much less power than older hardware. We would provide warranty services for the hardware should it fail.